Monday, April 2, 2012

Reflection on Issues Paper.

Well, the biggest paper of our Writing 150 careers is finished! Overall, I really liked this paper. Although it was long, and citing sources is at times exasperating, it was a good experience. Some of the things I liked most about this paper were....
1) I liked how we took the whole process in steps. First doing a rough draft, editing, polished draft, and then peer editing, and then the final draft.
2) I liked the fact that we got to completely choose our own topic.
3) I liked writing with approved sources that backed up my own claims.

This paper was a good experience, and I felt that I did a good job on it! Let's hope Chris feels that way too!

Monday, March 19, 2012

Issues Paper Formula.

Well today in class we talked about formulas (Which in my rush write I said made me think of math and babies!). But, we learned that there are formulas for our Issues Paper and this blog is to figure out what formula we want to follow.

I decided that my paper will be formatted along the 6 part thesis, partly because of the way I already structured my paper.

1-Intro: My personal anecdote about Proposition 8 is in here as well as my thesis, which is my map for the paper.

2- Statement and Discussion of Subject: This will be where I give a little history about gay marriage in America and specifically Proposition 8 in California.

3-Narration/Explanation: This is where I discuss gay marriage and why I feel it is more than just a question of equality, and offer some reasons that I will discuss in my reasoning and arguments.

4-Reasoning/Arguments: Focus on my research, all of the statistics, books, websites, and studies that I found that prove that gay marriage is an issue of morality and religion and how it can be solved legally.

5-Pathetic Part: This is my story of Proposition 8 in California. Use emotion here and relate it to how when the decision of gay marriage goes to the Supreme Court we need to support a constitutional amendment to ban gay marriage in the United States.

6-Conclusion: This is where I will wrap everything up.

Well, I think this is a formula for a pretty good paper if I do say so myself! Bring it on!

Saturday, March 17, 2012

Mission to Mexico!

Hey everyone! So, this blog is all about whatever we want it to be about. One of the main things on my mind right now is the opportunity that I have to serve the Lord for 2 years on a mission to Merida, Mexico. I can't wait to report to the MTC on May 23rd and be taught Spanish (We'll see how much I understand when I actually get out to the mission field). Merida sounds amazing! It is a city of several million people, surrounded by countryside with acres of farmland. The ocean is super close to it too! Cancun is also in my mission, so if you guys ever come to visit, look me up! A cool fact about my mission is that all of the elders sleep in hammocks, so I better get used to hammocks! I can't wait to serve the Lord on a mission to spread the Gospel! These are just some of the places in my mission! Enjoy!

Saturday, March 3, 2012

5 Issues Paper Sources!

Well, I am writing on the controversy of gay marriage. Specifically on the case of Proposition 8 in California during 2008 and the recent overturn of the voter's decision. So, here are 5 sources that I am going to use that will both provide evidence to my argument that gay marriage is not a constitutional right and is wrong. I also have some sources for my counterargument.

1) Arana, Gabriel. "Gay on trial: why more than marriage is at stake in the federal legal challenge to Prop. 8." The American Prospect 20.10 (2009): 16+. Gale Opposing Viewpoints In Context. Web. 3 Mar. 2012.
-This Article printed talks exactly about what the title says, why marriage is more than marriage is at stake of the challenge to Proposition 8. 

2) Egan, Patrick. California's Proposition 8: What Happened, and What Does the Future Hold?. San Francisco: National Gay and Lesbian Task Force Policy Institute, 2009. 1-16. Web. 
-This report talks about the statistics of the vote, and breaks down exactly who voted and why. This could be helpful in fighting for an appeal to the overturning of the voter's decision. 

-Well, I don't know exact citations for a website in general, but this website gives general information on why Proposition passed to begin with, and provides reasons that gay marriage in California should not be allowed.

4) Dolan, Maura. "Judge Strikes Down Prop. 8, allows Gay Marriage in California." L.A. Now. LA Times, 04 8 2010. Web. 3 Mar. 2012. 
-This is a blog put out by the LA Times describing in 2010 when the 3 judge panel in San Francisco declared Proposition 8 unconstitutional and reversed the voter's decisions. This article is important to my argument because it is where the fight to restore traditional marriage again began. 

Well, there are just some of my sources so far. I am really excited to write this paper!

Friday, March 2, 2012

Issue Paper Thesis!

Well, here is a tentative thesis for my Issues Paper on the seriousness of Proposition 8.

Thesis: Proposition 8 is not over and the fight to preserve traditional marriage still continues. We need to make sure that gay marriage is made illegal in the state of California because it is not ordained of God and if legalized, could go on to legalizing the practice in the entire United States. Although the LGBT community says that it is a question of rights, it is actually a question of social morality.

Well, there it is. It needs a little work, like I need to make it more concise, and work on refining ideas, but I needed the post now!

Let's write this paper!

Monday, February 27, 2012

Oh the Issues of the World... Which one to pick to write on?

Well, the Issues Paper is here. And we have to come up with 3 Issues.... but I'm pretty set on writing on this topic. I was part of the fight to preserve traditional marriage in California during the Proposition 8 campaign, investing time, money, and effort into the campaign. My dad was a Judge very involved in the legal system and offered much legal advice. I know a lot about this topic and can't wait to find out more about it and show everyone that this issue that started in California is not just a Californian issue, but a national issue. So, here is my topic!

1) Proposition 8 in California: The Truth is, this fight is not over! The 9th Circuit Court of Appeals on February 7th, 2012 just upheld the overturn on the people's decision to keep traditional marriage as the only legal marriage in California. We now have to take the fight to the Supreme Court!
-Research Questions: Why is the fight to uphold traditional marriage not over? What are the effects of gay marriage in California and why are we as members of the Church so against it?

Saturday, February 25, 2012

Reflection on Rhetorical Analysis!

Well, 2nd paper is done and out of the way. Comparing it to the OpEd I must admit that I liked the OpEd better. Although, I loved writing about tennis. Both papers had their ups and downs, I just liked the OpEd style better than the Rhetorical Analysis. I like writing with my own opinion, and not just analyzing rhetoric of another writer. I'm very excited for the Issues Paper and can't wait to get working on it!

Thursday, February 23, 2012

Now There's A Match: Breaking down Djokovic vs. Nadal for Tennis Fanatics!

The game of tennis has been around since the time of European monasteries (Where monks played a form of it with a rope tied across a courtyard). Throughout the years, it has evolved into a game of sharp strategies and powerful hits. Tennis is a sport that is as international as it comes, with star athletes hailing from any country in the world. The four major tennis competitions are the Opens (US, French, Australian, and Wimbledon). Here is where tennis athletes prove themselves; winning an Open is equivalent to winning the Super Bowl in tennis lingo. This past January held the Australian Open, a hard court tournament. The Finals match was epic beyond belief, with a near 6 hour match between the number 1 and 2 in the world…. Novak Djokivic and Rafael Nadal. So, naturally with the match being one of the most watched events of the month, blogs popped up all over the Internet about it. One of these was from the New York Times by Craig O’Shannessy. He responded to tennis fanatics desire to know every gritty detail of the match, every possible strategy in Djokovic’s game to beat the animal Nadal. His blog also offered some strategy advice to Nadal; some aspects maybe that he could change to beat the new animal in the zoo. New York Times Blogger Craig O’Shannessy breaks down the monumental match in an effective blog; informing tennis fans of the match using diction, authority in use of tennis terms, and appealing to logic with use of statistical evidence from the match.

Diction is important in any piece of rhetoric; and this being a sports piece; of course, the diction must reflect athleticism, speed, and triumph. O’Shannessy uses words like: “Heroic victory”, “engine room for victory”, and “aggressor” to illustrate the tennis match between Djokovic and Nadal. These words and phrases (as well as many others) are positioned throughout the blog to show the hard work and sweat put into this match. This match was one between the two top male tennis players in the world. Both have very different strategies; with everyone knowing that it would be a hard match to win for both. Readers needed to know these strategies in detail. O’Shannessy wrote how the strategies included Nadal’s typical plan to attack the net with powerful volleys and overheads. Reader’s found out that his typical attack was thwarted by Djokovics’s aggressive serve return. This is one of his major weapons, and it forced Nadal to stay behind the baseline running to lob balls back over the net. Djokovic got Nadal moving, forcing him to play every ball and never end the point. Djokovic ended points with big shots that shocked Nadal. “Aggression”, “dominating”, and “rewards” show tennis followers that the match was indeed one that stood up to everyone’s expectations. Part of the purpose of the blog was to offer advice to Nadal on how to overcome Djokovic in future match-ups.  O’Shannessy needed to show this in his blog through his diction. With phrases like “Answers are simple”, “involve courage”, and “out of his comfort zone”, he offers advice to Nadal that he needs to get out of his comfort zone and attack. He needs to be the aggressor to be rewarded in the game of tennis. This effective aspect of rhetoric helps fans realize the effort invested into this match, all for the win that brings the glory.

Along with great diction in the blog comes an authority that only one who really knows tennis can portray. This authority is seen in the way O’Shannessy uses real tennis terms. “Return”, “ground stokes”, and “serve motion” were all aspects of the game that O’Shannessy analyzed for fans. Tennis fans reading this blog loved this! As I was reading this for example, I really got into it. I knew that O’Shannessy knew his tennis stuff because he used phrases that I have used ever since I started playing tennis like “baseline rallies”, and “attacking the net”. Tennis players know all these strategies and saw them in the match between Djokovic and Nadal. So, we had to see them be analyzed in the blog. And O’Shannessy delivered, showing us his tennis knowledge.  He goes into great detail of Djokovic’s wicked return. He refers to it as his “first strike weapon”, and attributed Djokovic’s win to this aspect of his game. He says that Nadal needs to adapt to this style of play and work at overcoming it if he is ever going to win against Djokovic. This is another aspect of the blog that readers loved, the advice that was offered to Nadal on what to do against Djokovic next time. Tennis fans all over the world know that this will not be their last meeting. With O’Shannessy’s advice, he just builds the anticipation for the next match. Tennis fans will be waiting.

O’Shannessy also appeals to logic by providing statistical evidence to readers. This numerical evidence of the match is used throughout the blog: counts of body serves compared to down the middle serves, percentages of serves in, numbers of forehands compared to backhands, the list goes on.  With 36 groundstroke winners from Djokovic, 5 return winners, and 34% of hits from inside the base line, this evidence proves to readers that Djokovic was the clear winner. This statistical evidence presented by O’Shannessy to blog-reading, tennis-playing fanatics appeal to the logic of the match. Fans want to see the stats, want to know that the numbers actually show the winner. Obviously, Djokovic should have won because his stats were that much better. He came out on top of the match; resulting in the win and the title of the Australian Open.

Blog writer Craig O’Shannessy wrote about the Australian Open finals match between Novak Djokovic and Rafael Nadal, using diction, authority, and logical appeals to convey to his readers the drama of the match and to offer Nadal some pointers. This blog was effective in its purpose to inform readers of the match and weaknesses and strengths in the two player’s tennis games. Tennis is a game of skill and precision, speed and power. This blog effectively portrays that, and invites readers to stay updated on more of the Djokovic-Nadal rivalry!

Wednesday, February 22, 2012

Peer Review of the RA!

Well, my peer review experience was pretty similar to the OpEd process because I was out of town with Tiffany Pao and we had to review each others. But, peer review in general always helps. Tiffany and I were able to help each other and pointed out things that the other would not have noticed. It is always vital to have a second opinion when writing. Tiffany helped me organize and edit my paper and I hope I did the same for her.

Saturday, February 18, 2012

San Diego!

Well, here we are. A 3 day weekend to celebrate Presidents; but for us college students, this means get out of the bubble! So, I’m off to San Diego! San Diego is one of my favorite vacation spots in the world, and it just so happens that one of my best friends lives here now. Road trip to her house with 3 of my best friends! Along the way I was thinking about different figurative language devices that I would use in my paper…. Wait…. Who am I kidding? I didn’t think about that at all! That’s what weekends are for right? Well, this is my post. I really have put thought into my paper, I just am not planning on thinking about it this weekend. Deuces everyone! Have a good weekend.

Thursday, February 16, 2012

Rhetorical Analysis Figurative Language

Well.... FIRST of all. I JUST got my mission call like 2 hours ago and don't feel like doing homework AT ALL!!!! But, I have to of course. Me being the student that I am. I will be serving in the Mexico, Merida Mission speaking the Spanish language. I will report to the MTC on May 23rd! I just can't wait to serve the people of Mexico. Enjoy the pics!

Anyways... In my Rhetorical Analysis Paper I utilize several figurative language devices. I will list them as follows...
1) Diction: know every gritty detail
2) Metaphor: every possible strategy in Djokovic’s game to beat the animal Nadal.
3) I use some irony in the way that I describe how it is ironic that Djokovic is now on top. 

There are some other aspects of figurative language that I use throughout my paper, but I will save those for you to see in the actual paper. ;) 

Wednesday, February 8, 2012

Rhetorical Analysis: Thesis Statement.

I chose to write my Rhetorical Analysis on the Tennis Blog by New York Times Blogger Craig O'Shannessy titled Djokovic vs. Nadal: Breaking it Down. This blog is awesome and will really help me get into the game of tennis and the epic Australian Open Finals Match between Rafael Nadal and Novak Djokovic. My thesis will be as follows.... (Subject to some change!)

Thesis: Djokovic vs. Nadal: Breaking it down is an effective blog written by New York Times Blogger Craig O'Shannessy to inform tennis fanatics of the intense match between Rafael Nadal and Novak Djokovic. This blog uses diction, authority in use of tennis terms, and accurate analysis of strategies used by the contenders.

Wednesday, February 1, 2012

Rhetorical Analysis: 3 Possible Blogs to Analyze

Well, I went straight to the New York Times Blog Directory. Here, there are over 20 blogs in all sorts of areas. Browsing through these, I saw immediately the topics that I might want to cover. I saw Media Coder, which is a blog that posts about movies, books, and other media sources. The next blog I went to was called Straight Sets, a blog focusing completely on tennis, which is my favorite sport to both play and watch. GO JOHN ISNER! Then, the last blog I looked at was by Mark Bittman-and is all about Food. My favorite thing on Earth. So searching these blogs I have found these 3 posts to possible analyze-Tell me what you think!

1) Media Coder: Barnes and Noble Won't Sell Books from Amazon Publishing. This is all about Amazon's recent publishing efforts on their own publishing, very much against Barnes and Noble's will.

2) Straight Sets: Djokovic vs. Nadal; Breaking it Down.  An epic description of an epic Australian Open Mens Finals Match between Rafael Nadal and Novak Djokovic. Amazing.

3) Mark Bittmans Blog on Food and the Politics of It: Wait. So People are Cooking? This awesome blog post is all about refuting the thought that low to middle income families are not actually cooking, but rather spending money on fast food. Mark Bittman provides evidence that this is false, and that more people are cooking than experts thought.

So, these are the blogs that I'm thinking of analyzing. All 3 are awesome subjects that I would love to write about- So let me hear your opinions on which one I should do!

OpEd Process.... Was it Worth it?

These past few weeks of Wring 150 we have been able to write our own Opinion Editorial. We started with a blank sheet of paper, willing ideas to come to us. We transferred these ideas to our Blogs-which for many of us was a new experience to be Blogging! From these ideas we started our papers. My paper formed from the idea that I want all BYU students to appreciate and enjoy In-N-Out burgers as much as I do. This idea gave rise to a 900 word Opinion Editorial that worked on persuading all my readers that In-N-Out has the freshest ingredients, a strong work ethic, and is cheaper than other competition gourmet burger places!

 Particularly helpful throughout this process was the step-by-step process by which we had to go about writing our paper. We were required to have multiple drafts, which helped me keep going back to my paper and continuing to make it even better. Another aspect of the process that I particularly liked was the Peer Edit. This helped me to really see how my persuasive powers worked in my writing. I was able to make people who read it.... HUNGRY! That was one of my goals. I made them crave In-N-Out. But the Peer Edit helped me realize some minor mistakes and helped me make my paper just how I wanted it.

Monday, January 30, 2012

In-N-Out: What’s In it for BYU students?

Hey, you there! Yea...YOU! This is for you, BYU Students. 

In-N-Out is the famous gourmet fast food chain sensation that has swept the West Coast. Founded in 1948 by Harry and Esther Snyder, In-N-Out has been an establishment devoted to the quality of their food and the satisfaction of their customers since the beginning. Although some may argue that In-N-Out is a restaurant with just a boring menu and a fanatic following: In-N-Out is the best dining experience for BYU students because of their fresh ingredients, strong work ethic , and lowered prices compared to other gourmet fast food restaurants.

 “Quality you can taste”. This is In-N-Outs motto and so; of course, the ingredients of the food are vital. All of In-N-Out’s ingredients are 100% fresh. The beef patties are made directly by In-N-Out from the best cattle to be found, packaged in the business-owned packaging plant in Baldwin Park, CA.  100% pure beef with no preservatives added to it, this is just one of the reasons the burgers from In-N-Out spark millions of people’s taste buds. On top of that amazing patty, In-N-Out hand leafs all of their lettuce. They pick the best tomatoes they can find, and ship in the freshest potatoes straight from the farms. Employees make the special “secret sauce” (special Thousand Island dressing) right in the store, fresh every day. Every bun is made from sponge dough (the old fashioned way) and is toasted to perfection. My favorite part about dining out at In-N-Out is that first bite into the burger made from all of these fresh ingredients. It really is “Quality you can taste.”

Not only does In-N-Out have the freshest ingredients, but they also have a strong work ethic that makes eating at their establishment enjoyable. With high standards for employees making such fresh food, the company treats their employee’s right. Starting wage for restaurant workers is 10$s! The reason for this high wage the company says is because “They are important to us!” This is part of the reason In-N-Out is so successful. Employment opportunities are always filled at In-N-Out because of the high wages, paid vacation, flexible work schedule, and free food. Happy employees at In-N-Out mean more quality food and service for customers. So, when a BYU student has had a long day of class and homework, at night they can go to In-N-Out and know that they will be treated right. Workers at In-N-Out are happy and show this in the way that they respect all their customers! There is no place that treats their customers better. Customers are given their food as fast as possible, with always a smile and “have a good night” accompanying it! This is one of the reasons why BYU students should always eat at In-N-Out. Just last Saturday night, my friends and I were absolutely starving. So, a car load of BYU college students, all hungry as hounds, pulled into the In-N-Out parking lot at midnight. Now, the employees I’m sure were tired from their Saturday dinner rush, but they still served us with all the respect and attention that they would have shown to any other customer, at any other time of the day. This strong work-ethic is just one of the reasons BYU students should eat at In-N-Out.

Along with their work ethic, In-N-Out also serves its customers by keeping their prices for their burgers, fries, and shakes low compared to other gourmet fast food places. At 5 Guys, a national burger chain that is said to rival In-N-Out, to get just a cheeseburger is $5.79. At In-N-Out, a cheeseburger is just $4.12! This price difference is huge for a BYU student, who is always looking for the best bang for their buck. Just look at the difference in price of fries. A regular order of fries from In-N-Out is $1.35; whereas, 5 Guys fries are $2.69. In-N-Out also offers real ice cream milkshakes, made with the freshest cream to be found. 5 Guys does not even offer milkshakes on their menu.  In-N-Out works with the freshest ingredients, keeps their customers happy, AND keeps their burgers more than a dollar cheaper than the other competition. This is what I’m talking about! Cheap is the way we do things here in college, and this is why In-N-Out is a clear choice for a BYU college student.    

In-N-Out is the best choice for dining out for BYU students. They have the freshest ingredients, a work ethic that rivals even us BYU students, and lower prices than other gourmet fast food places. BYU students may have to drive just a little ways to get there, but the small amount of gas is worth the delicious and inexpensive food. We should support this business because of what they stand for and the quality food that they produce. In my experience with In-N-Out burgers, there is nothing better than to walk into to that homey atmosphere, and order my standard 2 cheeseburgers, no onion, fries, and medium drink. Then, wait just a couple minutes (salivating the whole while) to have an awesome employee call my order number. Then, that first bite into the burger--priceless.  

BYU Students=In-N-Out

Saturday, January 28, 2012

The Hunger Games: Movie as Good as the Book?

The Hunger Games by Suzanne Collins is a New York Times Bestseller that has swept the nation in its emotional pull, gripping action, and stunning story. Katniss, the new girl superhero for all ages, has grabbed the nation's attention and had everyone just waiting to hear the rest of her story. So, this amazing story is being turned into a movie? How good can this be? Well, from the official video trailer, the song "Safe and Sound" released as the theme of the movie by international pop-country star Taylor Swift, and reading reviews of the actors online, the movie looks like it will be almost as good as the book.

Here is the official video trailer for "The Hunger Games". I can't wait! Take a peek with me at the movie. 
Can't wait to go see it! Enjoy the trailer. And may the odds be ever in your favor!

Monday, January 23, 2012

Logos, Pathos, and Ethos. Logic, Emotions, and Authority.

My Opinion Editorial on In-N-Out Burger appeals to all three of the frames of thought.

 Logos, or Logic, is shown in how I provide evidence on how In-N-Out burgers are the best. I provide evidence showing that their ingredients are the freshest. Patties are freshly made, lettuce freshly picked, potatoes brought in straight from the fields, and the buns freshly made daily. Logically, this makes sense that In-N-Out has the best burger because of their fresh ingredients.

Pathos, or appealing to the emotion of my readers. I appeal to the emotion of my BYU college student readers by making them salivate when I tell them of the fresh ingredients. I appeal to their desires for cheap food because we are college students and do everything cheap.

Ethos, or showing my authority on the subject of In-N-Out burgers through my writing. I write with evidence, using quotes and links directly from the In-N-Out source. I also have personal experience with In-N-Out. Eating this all of my life, and having experience eating at different burger joints compared to In-N-Out, I consider myself a minor In-N-Out burger expert.

All of this evidence, authority, and appealing will hopefully sway my BYU student readers to come to realize that In-N-Out burgers are the absolute best.

Saturday, January 21, 2012

Claims, Reasons, and Assumptions Oh My!

So, we need to write out our claims, reasons, and assumptions for our Opinion Editorial. So here are mine!

Claims: In-N-Out burgers are the best choice of dining out for BYU students.

Reasons: They have the freshest ingredients. They have a high work ethic. They have family and Christian values. They are cheaper when compared with other gourmet fast food restaurants.

Assumptions: Because In-n-Out has the freshest ingredients, they obviously taste the best and BYU students should eat there. Because employees are kind and courteous it is an enjoyable experience for all to eat there. The food is cheap; therefore, for a cheap BYU student In-N-Out should be the number 1 choice for eating out.

Friday, January 13, 2012

OpEd Thesis! In N Out.

Well, it's official. I am going to be writing on how In-N-Out has the best burger out there. So, this blog tells me to put my thesis on. So here it is! 

OpEd Thesis: In-N-Out has the best burger in the business because of their fresh ingredients, Christian connections and practices, and lowered prices compared to other gourmet fast food restaurants.
Hope this works and I can't wait to get writing! 

Saturday, January 7, 2012

Op-Ed Ideas? Time to Brainstorm....

Opinion Editorial and what to write on for it. I need an issue that interests me and allows me to take a stand. There are several ideas that I have brainstormed to write about. 

1) The issue that really applies to me as a Freshman living in Helaman Halls is the issue of visiting hours for our dorm rooms. I feel that we should have more than just 4 hours in a week to be in members of the opposite gender's room. 

2) Another issue regarding Helaman Halls is the quality and number of times available to eat from the Cannon Center on Sundays. 

3) I could also write about why In'n'Out has the best burgers and the reasons why they do. 

These 3 topic ideas are just some that I could write on. I might end up picking another, but these are 3 that sound interesting and fun to write about. 

Friday, January 6, 2012

Who Am I? Seth Hoyt of Course!

 Seth Russell Hoyt III. That’s my name and I happen to love it. I am from Ione, California, a tiny town about an hour from Sacramento and an hour from Lake Tahoe. I am the oldest of 5 kids, but 2 of my younger siblings are already taller than I am. How does that work out? I’m the short one at 6”2 1/2. Anyways, I love playing tennis, volleyball, reading, hanging out with friends, dancing, eating food, and meeting new people. I am a freshman majoring in History, with plans to attend law school to become a criminal prosecutor.
  Here are just some of my favorite things. My favorite movie (well dang….. There are just so many!) would have to be Inception, The Help, and of course Star Wars. My favorite TV show of all time is 24. Jack Bauer is one of the best things to ever happen on television today. I love watching ESPN with my brothers and Dad (Top 10 plays of the day is a must see at the end of the day). My favorite food is Mexican and Italian food. My favorite book/series are Hunger Games (can’t WAIT for the movie!) Harry Potter, and The Rainmaker. I love life and am looking forward to this class and getting to know everyone in our small class.

I’ll see you around!